It’s the attack of the Chain Saw Terrorist!
That is a terrible shot of Rendivi… now she’s skinny and has ‘feet’ whereas in previous frames she didn’t? Her bust is on show again (simplified or not) and what an awkward way to carry Jet’s new sidearm…
How about showing her clutching the gun in both arms like it was a baby (which it is, it’s Jet’s ‘new baby’!) and running en pointe? It’s simpler to draw, and it’d still mess up the floor, I suspect! Then in frame three she’s got the thing to one side awkwardly, but she’s getting ready to hug Jet by then, so that’s okay.
Rendivi is childlike, but as the last page of the previous comic shows (2009-04-07.JPG), she’s got a nice figure and the potential for cheesecake posters, so in my humble opinion it’s important to keep full shots of her looking the best they can.
Jaylaw: Rendivi allways had very thin feet. Her leggs are part of her Alt Mode whitch is a giant sword but she is cappable of turning the very tips of them on a 90 degree angle. Its just because her leggs get progressively thinner towards the end, you cant see her feet from any other angle then side or 3/4rths.
I supposed i could have had her clutch the gun like a baby, but I instead wanted her to fall into Jet’s arms with the gun trainling low on the ground. It may have been more difficult to do the hugg shot with that giant flame toungue in the way of Jet’s nose cone. In anycase, Rendivi is sort of goofy around Jet, but shes no child according to mashina sensibilitys.
Extra info: No matter what you act like, If a female reatches sexual maturity, shes no longer a child. Its very litteral like the animal kingdom in the mashine race. Though Jet the white is Rendivi’s charge, He secretly likes her alot. There relationship is alittle more blurred then mere freinds. Dunno if i should get into that, She is a mature female, she just doesnt act like it.
Rendivi has to be supervised because the process used to create her was imperfect and impared her mental functions. She speaks in 3rd person, she acts with little thought, doesnt know her own streignth etc. Holy belives she cant be trusted roaming around outside of Edenworld.
Lyron must be confused, a mostly-naked, partly machine woman just ran over and is now attacking him…
I agree with Jaylaw about the first panel. It seems like she’s a little too skinny, and I did think that the metal on her chest came down further than it does there.
The end there was a bit of a surprise, but I’m liking where this is going. I wonder if she’ll clock him?
EWS: I’m guessing it is either because Lyron’s a Jotun with a more limited lifespan which is why his Alphel aura is so much smaller, or something to due with the events at the tree that causes it, right? My bet is on the former. I’m not sure if you’ve told us this in a previous update or not.
Mopz: if APHEL is also a physicle aura of ones soul, and jotun and mashina are immortal, then Lyron has perhapse traded his immortal life for something else at yggdrassil.. his life force is but a tiny ember now..
I suppose if Rendivi is Jet’s sister by being a product of him in some way, then it’s got a lot in common with how Machina guys acquire Guardia wives anyhow. And one might suppose that a loving relationship can have many definitions…
EWS: Ah, I see, I apologize. I skimmed through the wiki and the bios last time, so I probably should to re-read the wiki again. Something about “2000 years” is stuck in my head for some reason.
I hope not.. please do not be this cliche! (on the other hand, if you want to remind me of japan and anime.. this scene really brings home the bacon as far as that goes)
Yeah I am bitter.. bitter your main character is getting bullied so much. It bothers me a lot. Also my bad on the bound up bit. That last panel when he leans over.. I thought he was bound up.
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It’s the attack of the Chain Saw Terrorist!
That is a terrible shot of Rendivi… now she’s skinny and has ‘feet’ whereas in previous frames she didn’t? Her bust is on show again (simplified or not) and what an awkward way to carry Jet’s new sidearm…
How about showing her clutching the gun in both arms like it was a baby (which it is, it’s Jet’s ‘new baby’!) and running en pointe? It’s simpler to draw, and it’d still mess up the floor, I suspect! Then in frame three she’s got the thing to one side awkwardly, but she’s getting ready to hug Jet by then, so that’s okay.
Rendivi is childlike, but as the last page of the previous comic shows (2009-04-07.JPG), she’s got a nice figure and the potential for cheesecake posters, so in my humble opinion it’s important to keep full shots of her looking the best they can.
I know, I know. “Work In Progress”… ^-^
Jaylaw: Rendivi allways had very thin feet. Her leggs are part of her Alt Mode whitch is a giant sword but she is cappable of turning the very tips of them on a 90 degree angle. Its just because her leggs get progressively thinner towards the end, you cant see her feet from any other angle then side or 3/4rths.
I supposed i could have had her clutch the gun like a baby, but I instead wanted her to fall into Jet’s arms with the gun trainling low on the ground. It may have been more difficult to do the hugg shot with that giant flame toungue in the way of Jet’s nose cone. In anycase, Rendivi is sort of goofy around Jet, but shes no child according to mashina sensibilitys.
Extra info: No matter what you act like, If a female reatches sexual maturity, shes no longer a child. Its very litteral like the animal kingdom in the mashine race. Though Jet the white is Rendivi’s charge, He secretly likes her alot. There relationship is alittle more blurred then mere freinds. Dunno if i should get into that, She is a mature female, she just doesnt act like it.
Rendivi has to be supervised because the process used to create her was imperfect and impared her mental functions. She speaks in 3rd person, she acts with little thought, doesnt know her own streignth etc. Holy belives she cant be trusted roaming around outside of Edenworld.
Lyron must be confused, a mostly-naked, partly machine woman just ran over and is now attacking him…
I agree with Jaylaw about the first panel. It seems like she’s a little too skinny, and I did think that the metal on her chest came down further than it does there.
jaylaw/schmedder : How about now?
Oh sh- ! RUN LYRON!
j/k
Although a rampaging Rendivi does look a bit scary.
I bet Lyron’s now thinking “Aww crap! Here we go again….”
I think the way Rendivi is holding the gun shows her immaturity better than holding it like a baby.
The end there was a bit of a surprise, but I’m liking where this is going. I wonder if she’ll clock him?
EWS: I’m guessing it is either because Lyron’s a Jotun with a more limited lifespan which is why his Alphel aura is so much smaller, or something to due with the events at the tree that causes it, right? My bet is on the former. I’m not sure if you’ve told us this in a previous update or not.
Mopz: if APHEL is also a physicle aura of ones soul, and jotun and mashina are immortal, then Lyron has perhapse traded his immortal life for something else at yggdrassil.. his life force is but a tiny ember now..
It looks much cuter now! ^-^
I suppose if Rendivi is Jet’s sister by being a product of him in some way, then it’s got a lot in common with how Machina guys acquire Guardia wives anyhow. And one might suppose that a loving relationship can have many definitions…
I wonder if that is the gun that Rendivi and Jet were working on in book 6.
Love the last panel. The pan over and then you get a shock rageful Garda.
EWS: Looks fine to me now!
The transformation’s coming soon! *very very happy*
EWS: Ah, I see, I apologize. I skimmed through the wiki and the bios last time, so I probably should to re-read the wiki again. Something about “2000 years” is stuck in my head for some reason.
*Sighs* Shes going to attack a bound up prisoner?
I hope not.. please do not be this cliche! (on the other hand, if you want to remind me of japan and anime.. this scene really brings home the bacon as far as that goes)
dang, Someone is bitter! hes not bound up, the cuffs were taken off of him a few pages back.
@Edenworld Saga July 21,2009 1:59PM
Yeah I am bitter.. bitter your main character is getting bullied so much. It bothers me a lot. Also my bad on the bound up bit. That last panel when he leans over.. I thought he was bound up.